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Some music I created. Trying to sound industrial.

Posted: Tue Mar 25, 2014 12:59 pm
by ph0sph0ruz
While I'm learning coding and graphic techniques I've been dabbling with some music. I need to learn how to do some stuff like Connor, I have no experience with wind instruments. :(

https://soundcloud.com/ph0sph0ruz/industrial1

https://soundcloud.com/ph0sph0ruz/industrial2

One bonus track, more of a horror/sci-fi track, starts really slow:
https://soundcloud.com/ph0sph0ruz/eeire

Re: Some music I created. Trying to sound industrial.

Posted: Tue Mar 25, 2014 5:44 pm
by dandymcgee
Oh yeah, totally saw this on your site after you posted in Hello, World! topic. Kinda blew up my speakers.. but I liked it a lot haha. Keep at it man.

Edit: Ooooo Eeire is wayy better than the industrial tracks. I could listen to that for hours [while playing a game] and not even notice it was there.

Re: Some music I created. Trying to sound industrial.

Posted: Tue Mar 25, 2014 7:01 pm
by ph0sph0ruz
dandymcgee wrote:Oh yeah, totally saw this on your site after you posted in Hello, World! topic. Kinda blew up my speakers.. but I liked it a lot haha. Keep at it man.

Edit: Ooooo Eeire is wayy better than the industrial tracks. I could listen to that for hours [while playing a game] and not even notice it was there.
Actually that was my first gut feeling too. Thanks for the feedback. I've been trying to go more for a feel and I think the Eerie track captures a certain feeling way better than I did with the others.

Re: Some music I created. Trying to sound industrial.

Posted: Sun Mar 30, 2014 2:22 pm
by YourNerdyJoe
Eeire is one sick track. So far it's my favorite out of your songs.
Industrial2 is not bad either. Seems like you already started improving after the first one.
I'm a HUGE industrial fan so it's cool see other people on this forum have an interest in it.

Keep at it. I wanna see more insane tracks like Eeire ;)

Re: Some music I created. Trying to sound industrial.

Posted: Sun Mar 30, 2014 4:17 pm
by ph0sph0ruz
I made two more this weekend. I'm going more for feelings when I'm writing these.

The first is a peaceful track:
https://soundcloud.com/ph0sph0ruz/peaceful

Then the second is more of an action type track.
https://soundcloud.com/ph0sph0ruz/ready2fight

Mod note: Fixed link.

Re: Some music I created. Trying to sound industrial.

Posted: Sun Mar 30, 2014 4:18 pm
by ph0sph0ruz
YourNerdyJoe wrote:Eeire is one sick track. So far it's my favorite out of your songs.
Industrial2 is not bad either. Seems like you already started improving after the first one.
I'm a HUGE industrial fan so it's cool see other people on this forum have an interest in it.

Keep at it. I wanna see more insane tracks like Eeire ;)
Thanks for the feedback. 8-)

Re: Some music I created. Trying to sound industrial.

Posted: Mon Mar 31, 2014 8:16 am
by dandymcgee
Both links were pointing to peaceful, I changed the second to point to "Ready2fight" as I'm assuming that's your action track.

Ready2fight:
I think the part from 0:28 to 0:54 could have ended at 0:40, it was a cool effect but got annoying to listen to.
I like the 0:54 - 0:55 transition where the weird instrument disappeared.
I expected the 1:21 transition to happen at 1:11, after two measures of the guitar? solo. After seeing what you did with the cymbal tap coming in before the transition though, I think it would have been best at 1:18 after the B-flat.
After this it transitions back to the weird instrument, but apparently I have Stockholm syndrome because the familiarity somewhat comforts me this time around.
At 1:42 it lacked some signal that the song was coming to a close and instead ended abruptly at 1:49. Another solo or a fade would have seemed appropriate here.

Peaceful:
0:20 - 0:30 Holy shit. That is fucking beautiful.
1:50 - Another very well placed solo.
I like how at 2:31 you briefly return to the solo and a few of the other sequences to "summarize" your genius before closing it out. This song ends perfectly.

As my notes make fairly obvious I liked Peaceful more, I could listen to that for hours easily. Ready2fight is definitely good though and I hope you keep working on stuff like it.

You clearly have a good understanding of song progression and an intriguing choice of instrumentals. Thanks for sharing!

Re: Some music I created. Trying to sound industrial.

Posted: Mon Mar 31, 2014 5:18 pm
by ph0sph0ruz
dandymcgee wrote:Both links were pointing to peaceful, I changed the second to point to "Ready2fight" as I'm assuming that's your action track.

Ready2fight:
I think the part from 0:28 to 0:54 could have ended at 0:40, it was a cool effect but got annoying to listen to.
I like the 0:54 - 0:55 transition where the weird instrument disappeared.
I expected the 1:21 transition to happen at 1:11, after two measures of the guitar? solo. After seeing what you did with the cymbal tap coming in before the transition though, I think it would have been best at 1:18 after the B-flat.
After this it transitions back to the weird instrument, but apparently I have Stockholm syndrome because the familiarity somewhat comforts me this time around.
At 1:42 it lacked some signal that the song was coming to a close and instead ended abruptly at 1:49. Another solo or a fade would have seemed appropriate here.

Peaceful:
0:20 - 0:30 Holy shit. That is fucking beautiful.
1:50 - Another very well placed solo.
I like how at 2:31 you briefly return to the solo and a few of the other sequences to "summarize" your genius before closing it out. This song ends perfectly.

As my notes make fairly obvious I liked Peaceful more, I could listen to that for hours easily. Ready2fight is definitely good though and I hope you keep working on stuff like it.

You clearly have a good understanding of song progression and an intriguing choice of instrumentals. Thanks for sharing!
Thank you for fixing the link. Ready2fight was the one I was going for on the action song.

I really appreciate the feedback. I've been playing guitar for over 30 years now and listening to a lot of music of course but these are the first handful that I've written.

I agree that Ready2fight was repetitive. I think it needs some more work. I really didn't do too much arrangement on it to be honest. I had to mess around with the guitar sound on that one a bit to get it to my liking also.

Glad you really liked the Peaceful one. I did take some care to place the notes and come up with the phrasing in C Major. I never worked with the flutes before and I had two different flutes in certain places.

I'm really humbled by your comments. Thank you.

Re: Some music I created. Trying to sound industrial.

Posted: Mon Aug 11, 2014 7:43 am
by ph0sph0ruz
This isn't industrial but it's my first FL Studio track. I finally broke down and bought it.

https://soundcloud.com/ph0sph0ruz/demo-on-the-edge

Re: Some music I created. Trying to sound industrial.

Posted: Mon Aug 11, 2014 8:10 pm
by ph0sph0ruz
And yet another test.. this time more piano and more upbeat. I haven't done anything like this before.

https://soundcloud.com/ph0sph0ruz/demo-new-day